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Encroaching Darkness – A 33 Word Horror Story

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Sunlit color succumbed to his heavy sudden darkness. Formless, expanding, he seized her trembling hand, enveloping upward. Inches seared, yielded, disappeared beneath her shoulder.

Pausing, eyes still recognizable, glinting, he spoke. “No. Slower.”

This was written from the horror story prompt at Trifextra: Week 10.


19 thoughts on “Encroaching Darkness – A 33 Word Horror Story

  1. This is really spooky. Nicely done.
    I don’t really like the 33 word thing so much for the telling of a whole story, but it is a great exercise in rewording things or getting rid of unnecessary words or phrases. Or should I say:
    “33 words = not nearly long enough of a story.
    33 words = a great excercise in shedding unneeded words”

    • Thanks, TTD. Yes this is a great exerxcise in shedding unneeded words. I do prefer the 100 word story for that, though. My work on Words One Hundred is still difficult a lot of the time, but it feels more like I’m able to tell a story with those. 33 words feels like I should be trying for poetry instead of ‘story’. Definitely a challenge.

  2. Thanks so much for linking up with Trifecta this week. Hope to see you back on Monday (10 am Eastern) for the new prompt and some exciting news about the changes Trifecta is making to spread the word about our writing community.

  3. Great use of wording, they sounded heavy and dark. Funny, I would not have you pegged as a horror fan. But I love it, hope you write more of these!

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