Today’s post is my contribution, inspired by the photo prompt above, to this week’s 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups — Week #2, from The Head’s Office. To add your own or read the other contributions, hit this link. This weekly challenge is for writers who want to extend their audience and get feedback on their work. My regulars will know that I appreciate honest feedback, even if the piece doesn’t work for you. Hearing how others experience my work helps me learn. This is what I wrote (I couldn’t think of a title):
He didn’t turn around. I held Cara’s baseball bat, trying to seem like I just happened to have it as I came upon him in my yard. “Why’re you here?”
“I’ve every right.”
“What?” I backed farther away, glad Cara was at school.
“Listen,” he answered, without raising his voice, “I can be anyplace I like. You think you have the right to cordon off the world, but none of you do.”
I stumbled back inside. Safe behind my door, turning over his words, I became uncomfortable with knowing I should call the police well before Cara was due home.
*7/24/11 – In the spirit of full disclosure: Without changing any of the words, I moved the first sentence, which was the short line of dialogue, to the end of the first paragraph.