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Cinquain #2

Photo by Ré Harris

Thirst,
endless, engineered,
unrelenting, imprinting, degrading.
Misnamed “failure,” want disturbs.
Empty.

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6 thoughts on “Cinquain #2

  1. Excellent! Creating within an artificial frame, like this, just fascinates me, as we’ve talked about before. The words, ‘failure’ and ‘Empty’ takes the meaning of thirst in a completely different path than simply being thirsty, if that makes sense. The thirst could be for so much more and you’ve shown that in a few words. Such is the challenge of poetry.

    • I’m so glad you liked it. Thanks for introducing me to the cinquain. I’ve only been able to concentrate on writing very short things lately, so I realized that I should just go with it. You caught on to what I was trying to do with that first word, the noun that becomes the subject of the poem, and that feels good!

    • I learned about cinquains from Lisa over at The Story River. I’m glad this one worked for you.

      This is the wall next to my kitchen sink. You can see the top left corner the ’50s sink (at least I think it’s from the ’50s) at the bottom of the photo. The guitar is a Restoration Hardware Christmas ornament I got on sale after the holiday in 2009. It usually hangs against the wood between the windows, so I can see it while I wash dishes. I was taking pictures of something else, when it occurred to me that the wall would look better in a photo than it does in my kitchen. It does. I’m glad you like it.

  2. Wonderful Ré, I love the visual too. They fit nicely – do you often take photos and write? When I first saw that I was touched, the huge space and the small guitar, haunting, good word satsumaart! 🙂

    • Thank you, Roxie. I’ve been feeling the photography lately and started using my camera more. I am hoping that I can use more of my own images to illustrate my posts, but I’m not sure how that will go. So far, I haven’t written anything that was inspired by my own photo. I’ll see how that goes, too. Thanks for visiting!

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